Quick beta read?
Jan. 19th, 2023 01:26 pmI've got enough now, thank you! :)
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I have been writing and rewriting the opening of Deadfall, and I'd like someone who hasn't read the previous version, either as a beta or when I posted it under lock last year, to read the first 1450 words and answer a couple of questions.
I suppose I should mention the genre: secondary-world fantasy inspired by Italy and central Europe of the 30 Years' War era.
1) What questions are raised in your mind? Are they the sort that result from story-killing confusion or the sort that intrigue you to read on to learn more?
2) Would you keep reading? If not, at which point would you stop and put the book down?
Those who have beta-read are welcome to read and comment, but as you already know the answers to questions I am attempting to raise in this section, it'll be harder to figure out how they land to a new audience. :)
I'm not looking for grammar/spelling type stuff here, but a broader overview as to whether or not this opening is working. Copy editing will come later, when I've got the thing figured out.
ANYWAY, drop a comment here and I'll DM you a Dropbox link to the Word doc. You can email or DM me your response.
THANK YOU!
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I have been writing and rewriting the opening of Deadfall, and I'd like someone who hasn't read the previous version, either as a beta or when I posted it under lock last year, to read the first 1450 words and answer a couple of questions.
I suppose I should mention the genre: secondary-world fantasy inspired by Italy and central Europe of the 30 Years' War era.
1) What questions are raised in your mind? Are they the sort that result from story-killing confusion or the sort that intrigue you to read on to learn more?
2) Would you keep reading? If not, at which point would you stop and put the book down?
Those who have beta-read are welcome to read and comment, but as you already know the answers to questions I am attempting to raise in this section, it'll be harder to figure out how they land to a new audience. :)
I'm not looking for grammar/spelling type stuff here, but a broader overview as to whether or not this opening is working. Copy editing will come later, when I've got the thing figured out.
ANYWAY, drop a comment here and I'll DM you a Dropbox link to the Word doc. You can email or DM me your response.
THANK YOU!