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More Spindrift...
Because I said I'd do it, when I last posted samples of the tight thumbnails I've been working on, here's the original sketchy thumbs for pages 4 and 5, and the new, tight thumbs.
A few minor differences there, huh? What I've done is mostly work with emphasizing the left-to-right movement across the pages. On page 4, I didn't want to end with Rinchen staring left, although by right he should be, since I have the camera set up with Manoj staring right, so he's staring straight ahead and a bit down at Manoj there on the bottom. And I've placed the heads in the top and bottom panels on the left and the right to emphasize that movement. There's a bit of a Z movement through the whole page now, and Rinchen's got the upper hand since he's higher.
I think separating the heads with the big panel both makes the whole page look more balanced and makes the scene more of a BOOM. BOOM. BOOM. in pacing than the original version, which had the big panel on top and the two guys staring each other down across two panels on the bottom. I ahve more negative space, too.
On the next page, I'm working with the left -> right movement again, and made panel 1 bigger, to emphasize what's going on in it, and to keep Rinchen higher than Manoj. The different levels say something about their characters, and also make it more visually interesting. It *also* serves as a way for me to move the "camera" around so that Rinchen is now facing to the right, when Manoj was facing right in the previous page. I remain unconvinced that readers who are more intelligent than whelk will get mixed up when reading a scene if the camera shows one character facing one way, and then facing another way in a subsequent panel without any sort of transition, but then again I think in 3D quite easily, so I've got a 3-dimensional picture of the scene in my head to start with and can keep everything straight with few cues. Editors insist that you need to have transitions if you've going to ahve them facing every-which-way though, so I might as well get used to doing it.
Panel 4, with the feet, was written by SOMEONE to be Yet Another Closeup of Rinchen, and while I think he's quite cute, that was way too many pictures of heads on that page, plus it will be ABSOLUTELY VITAL to the plot later that you remember that Rinchen's only wearing one sandal, so I chose to focus on his feet for one more panel (you see them on page 3) on the off-chance that you readers will actually remember it. Through long, hard experience I know that there will still be a number of you who miss that, but at least I tried.
And to show you how small these are for real:
This is reduced to 72ppi for Web display, of course, but I'm working at 300ppi and can print a page of 9 full 2-page spreads on one sheet of paper. I zoom in really closely to work, naturally, so I'm working at exact-pixel size for the most part, but this allows me to zoom out and see the whole thing as one full composition. The next step will be to take each individual page and blow it up big - it will be very fuzzy, I assure you - and do the refined pencils on top of it. I will probably do that in actual, real pencil, since my big scanner is due to be delivered next week.
A few minor differences there, huh? What I've done is mostly work with emphasizing the left-to-right movement across the pages. On page 4, I didn't want to end with Rinchen staring left, although by right he should be, since I have the camera set up with Manoj staring right, so he's staring straight ahead and a bit down at Manoj there on the bottom. And I've placed the heads in the top and bottom panels on the left and the right to emphasize that movement. There's a bit of a Z movement through the whole page now, and Rinchen's got the upper hand since he's higher.
I think separating the heads with the big panel both makes the whole page look more balanced and makes the scene more of a BOOM. BOOM. BOOM. in pacing than the original version, which had the big panel on top and the two guys staring each other down across two panels on the bottom. I ahve more negative space, too.
On the next page, I'm working with the left -> right movement again, and made panel 1 bigger, to emphasize what's going on in it, and to keep Rinchen higher than Manoj. The different levels say something about their characters, and also make it more visually interesting. It *also* serves as a way for me to move the "camera" around so that Rinchen is now facing to the right, when Manoj was facing right in the previous page. I remain unconvinced that readers who are more intelligent than whelk will get mixed up when reading a scene if the camera shows one character facing one way, and then facing another way in a subsequent panel without any sort of transition, but then again I think in 3D quite easily, so I've got a 3-dimensional picture of the scene in my head to start with and can keep everything straight with few cues. Editors insist that you need to have transitions if you've going to ahve them facing every-which-way though, so I might as well get used to doing it.
Panel 4, with the feet, was written by SOMEONE to be Yet Another Closeup of Rinchen, and while I think he's quite cute, that was way too many pictures of heads on that page, plus it will be ABSOLUTELY VITAL to the plot later that you remember that Rinchen's only wearing one sandal, so I chose to focus on his feet for one more panel (you see them on page 3) on the off-chance that you readers will actually remember it. Through long, hard experience I know that there will still be a number of you who miss that, but at least I tried.
And to show you how small these are for real:
This is reduced to 72ppi for Web display, of course, but I'm working at 300ppi and can print a page of 9 full 2-page spreads on one sheet of paper. I zoom in really closely to work, naturally, so I'm working at exact-pixel size for the most part, but this allows me to zoom out and see the whole thing as one full composition. The next step will be to take each individual page and blow it up big - it will be very fuzzy, I assure you - and do the refined pencils on top of it. I will probably do that in actual, real pencil, since my big scanner is due to be delivered next week.