Tonight's inking test

[telophase]

A mountain scene from Qwan 3.

Original:	Mine:

Again, I think she was using a tone of clouds and mist. I didn't have anyting remotely like that, so filled it with a sand tone and used a coarse airbrush to rough up the edges of the misty bits. And my stairs need to be darker.

Comments

[the-z.livejournal.com]

Once again, great job emulating the originals so well. At this point, I'm hesitant to point out the lineweight issue again. I wonder if it's just more your style to be lighter. It still thing 'chunkier' inks, especially in a rocky background, would add more depth and realism. The thinner lines make it seem more... etheral? I'm not sure if that's exactly the sentiment I'm looking for. But it seems less solid overall-- less substantial.

You're doing really well with the tones.

[telophase.livejournal.com]

Heh, if I'm naturally lighter, I'll be happy with that - one of the problems I feel I had with PBR was that my shapes were too solid and ... well, I'm not sure I have the words. There wasn't enough liveliness to them. I need tob reak up my line more, and get it thinner in places, I think. (And come to think of it, a more ethereal feel might be what's called for in Gay Tibetan Martial Artists - the school is supposed to be legendary, anyway.)

I'm also still getting used to the tablet pressure. Maybe I need to adjust it to be more sensitive. I might try that the next one I do.

Anyway, keep pointing out line weight when you see it - I'm trying and while I think I've gotten closer to it, I'm still not there. I might be trying a panel from Rurouni Kenshin next - I think I saw one last night that I wanted to try, but now I have to go find it.

[rushthatspeaks.livejournal.com]

I like your rocks better-- they have something of the feel of Chinese landscape paintings, which is not an association I'd make with the original, and which is quite appropriate. And I think your stairs are just fine.

However, the place I think you could use some heavier lines is the left side of that little building, and specifically that porch or gateway that the stairs run up to. The leftmost vertical line in the entire building is so light that I honestly get a feel of the roof as floating without support because I visually tune that one out. That entire section needs to be heavier to hold down the roof's larger dark areas.

[telophase.livejournal.com]

Yup, you're right. Noted, thanks. :D