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One thing writing and art have in common is that it takes uploading or sending it elsewhere to notice the GLARING MISTAKES that were completely invisible prior to that.
I have been trying not to reread (and therefore rewrite) Deadfall (formerly The Thing) before I get notes back, although I did check out the first few pages and noted:
1) a typo in the VERY FIRST LINE
2) the same word used over and over and over within two paragraphs
3) a linking sentence accidentally edited out so Character B has an action that is immediately interrupted by a paragraph of description that bears no relation to the action. Sigh.
I can only hope I didn't do that throughout the entire damn thing. Ah well.
I have been trying not to reread (and therefore rewrite) Deadfall (formerly The Thing) before I get notes back, although I did check out the first few pages and noted:
1) a typo in the VERY FIRST LINE
2) the same word used over and over and over within two paragraphs
3) a linking sentence accidentally edited out so Character B has an action that is immediately interrupted by a paragraph of description that bears no relation to the action. Sigh.
I can only hope I didn't do that throughout the entire damn thing. Ah well.
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And a couple paragraphs later it was still still.
Heck, at least you don't have to talk about the complete lack of movement around the moonshiners' apparatus.
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